ROUND ONE
1
Still water -
After the bubble pops,
Ripples
2
Late September
cows graze on Queen Anne's Lace
across the fence
Ku #2 goes ahead because its second phrase is not broken into two parts.
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3
blatant gust of wind
strong trees bend and snap in
two
weak grass bends - then straightens
4
the dewdrop quivers
and gently drops from the
leaf
the river flows free
Ku #4 goes ahead because it is (barely) a smaller view with less visible philosophy.
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5
Howlies and Haiku
Pretentious combination
A
gringo's salsa
6
A bowl of blue plums
The valley full of wood
smoke
October dawning
Ku #6 goes ahead because when I saw that I had copied in #5 I was sorry I had let it into the contest. It does not belong.
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7
sizzling by the sea
each on their garish beach
towel
withered ladies sleep
8
A malicious smile
radiates down from the
sun
painting skin bright red.
Ku #7 goes ahead because the 'malicious smile on the sun' is just too unhaiku.
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9
Goldenrod sprays wash
across September meadow,
fade
beside the path.
10
Sweat berries in red fingers
drowning love pictures
on a stone
and a turtle in the grass
Ku #9 goes ahead because I cannot figure out exactly what is happening in #10. It looks like a haiku but the meaning escapes me.
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11
august afternoon
in the woods a mossy stone
is a
squirrel's throne
12
blackberry bushes
blooming morning-glory
vines
strife on picket fence
Ku #12 goes ahead because of the rhymes in #11 (which I admit sounds like a Japanese haiku sounds with the repeating sounds). However, in English write as the English . . .
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13
Blue sea blows
magic filters through the
air
Blessed by a god
14
my love fell so hard
rained like steel coated
diamonds
why were you clouded
Ku #13 goes ahead because #14 has an extra line break. Sorry, I liked the inner connection within the poem. Very close.
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15
While in our forest
the tree branches were
twisted;
my tongue was as well.
16
the lead drops upon the page
pencil still in
hand
sweat rolls down her face
Ku # 15 goes ahead because #16 stayed too close to the author and the observation of the one writing the poem.
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ROUND TWO
2
Late September
cows graze on Queen Anne's Lace
across the fence
4
the dewdrop quivers
and gently drops from the leaf
the river flows
free
Ku #4 goes ahead because it feels as if it has a deeper meaning. # 2 is simply a nice scene well-portrayed in words.
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6
A bowl of blue plums
The valley full of wood
smoke
October dawning
7
sizzling by the sea
each on their garish beach
towel
withered ladies sleep
Ku # 6 goes ahead because of the unusual coordination of colors, smells and season. Both poems have too many line-breaks so that fault is even.
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9
Goldenrod sprays wash
across September meadow,
fade
beside the path.
12
blackberry bushes
blooming morning-glory
vines
strife on picket fence
Ku # 9 goes ahead though both poems are excellent and could be published anywhere.
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13
Blue sea blows
magic filters through the
air
Blessed by a god
15
While in our forest
the tree branches were
twisted;
my tongue was as well.
Ku #15 goes ahead because of its twisted wordplay.
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ROUND THREE
4
the dewdrop quivers
and gently drops from the leaf
the river flows
free
6
A bowl of blue plums
The valley full of wood
smoke
October dawning
Ku #4 goes ahead. Though #6 is marvelous, the extra line break hurts.
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9
Goldenrod sprays wash
across September meadow,
fade
beside the path.
15
While in our forest
the tree branches were
twisted;
my tongue was as well.
Ku # 9 goes ahead. I loved the combination in #15 but "sprays wash" is even better.
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ROUND FOUR - Winners' Circle
4
the dewdrop quivers
and gently drops from the
leaf
the river flows free
- Richard Francis
9
Goldenrod sprays wash
across September meadow,
fade
beside the path.
- M.O.
Two very damp good haiku. Let us call it a draw. Congratulations to Richard Francis and to M.O. for excellent work. Thanks to everyone who entered the contest. blessed be!
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